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You asked me,
Who has your key?
What Key?
The key to your heart
I looked away &&&
When I didn't respond,
You asked me

Can I have the key?
But when I still was quiet,
And wouldn't look at you,

Please.. I really want to have it..
The truth is, I no longer hold the key.
I've trusted so many people with it,
Too many.
I don't have it. Don't know where it went.
I've given it to so many people who have
Unlocked my heart
Just to hurt me. I don't have a key to give you.
I'm sorry.
But.. If I did, could I trust you,
To hold it safe?
Close to your heart,
Where no harm could come of it?
Could I trust you,
Not to walk away once I've let you in?
Once you've seen what I am?
I said,

I'm sorry. I can't....
  • Mood: Nervous
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NamineWolf Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
Aww...that's how I feel right now too... I feel "vulnerable" actually...
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Sparkey38 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
its really not a good feeling... like, youre all open and anyone could hurt you....
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NamineWolf Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
Yup. Exactly..it's scary...
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Sparkey38 Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:(
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NamineWolf Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
:huggle:
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angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student Artist
i like it , some times that how i feel alot of times
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Sparkey38 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah :/
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angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Student Artist
D:<
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bandnerd5 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student General Artist
i agree. but i loved it because i know that feeling
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Sparkey38 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :)
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bandnerd5 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student General Artist
your welcome my dear :3
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012   Writer
My only 'crit' is that you have the speakers words in italics at the end, when it is the questioners words which are in italics the rest of the piece.
Otherwise I can really relate to this, and you have written it well. The emotion shines through, the nervousness and fragility as well as a sense of loss.
Good writing.
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Sparkey38 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :)
really its just that its thoughts and narration in bold and people actually speaking in italics. i wouldn't have done it that way if it were like a conversation. that would be to confusing but i figured people would understand that its a final response.
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012   Writer
It is a final response, but I figured it was two people and the one who was actually speaking, not narrating in their head, was the italics. That's why it confused me.
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Sparkey38 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
the italics are the speaking. for both sides. i haveta figure a diff way to do it for a one person italics and the other person something else... not bold cause i use that for like everything...
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012   Writer
Just have it in normal text, no italics and no bold for that part.
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Sparkey38 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
okay.
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